I think your paragraph was very detailed, but you were more focused on the characters in the story than anything else that happened. I also would of mentioned or talked about Mary lou’s cousin coming down to stay and, how they managed to set-up the equipment for Carl Ray.
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1 alexisma // Dec 5, 2006 at 2:59 pm
I think your paragraph was very detailed, but you were more focused on the characters in the story than anything else that happened. I also would of mentioned or talked about Mary lou’s cousin coming down to stay and, how they managed to set-up the equipment for Carl Ray.
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